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Post  PoseWanKenobi on Fri Nov 20, 2009 10:25 pm

So, somewhy I'm going to write a story, an alien abduction story... I'm basically doing this for english class, only there we need to continue a story with 500 words, this will probably be longer, well, let's get to it:

"Dude, speed up!" Robert yelled at his 10 year old brother, who was a major annoyance. He himself was 16 and by his mum's demand was told to walk his brother Benton to the ice cream parlor.
As soon as the little one caught up with the big bro, they stepped into the parlor.
It seemed rather odd, something was off with the cashier, maybe the clothes, the glasses, maybe the attitude that you could read from the man's face.

"Robby, I want a chocolate-flavoured ice cream!" Benton yelled all over the parlor, fortunately there was no one but them and the cashier.
"Well, you heard the boy," Rob told the cashier.
In a blink of an eye the cashier took a weird gun from under his apron. It wasn't an ordinary weapon, it looked like one of those laser guns on "Star Trek".
"I have your parents, follow my every command or you'll find a laser flying towards your brother real soon.
Rob chuckled: "Yeah, and I'm Cat-Woman, just get the ice cream, PLEASE?"

It seemed like the "cashier" was dead serious. He pulled the trigger, slightly missing Benton, hitting the wall behind him. The wall literally melted.
Both of the brothers looked at him in... Fear.
"You were saying?"
"I have your mother and father. Obey my every order or you and your parents will die!" the man explained.

(I have no motivation of continuing this, as this is not my style BUT I think I'll post a criminal story. Stay tuned folks, I mean the opposite, I feel embarrased when someone reads my work but here it goes, btw... I'd appreciate if you looked for grammar mistakes that I might have made, I know, I know, grammar-perfection freako, oh well...)
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Post  olimbeau on Sat Nov 21, 2009 12:46 am

LOL

nice work but i'm very noob in english i can too help you!!
but i love your idea Smile
Bent kill boy who don't sell ice scream ? Razz Razz
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Post  LazyJo on Sat Nov 21, 2009 4:34 am

Well, that's a nice start! I enjoyed your story. Is the topic's title got something to do with the story?

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Umm olim, is it just me or you made a contradiction?
i'm very noob in english i can too help you!!
How can you help someone if you say that you're not good in english?
(Comment tu peux l'aider si tu dis que t'es pas bon en anglais? xD)

Do you mean...
i'm very noob in english, but i can help you!!

Umm... yeah.. I really had nothing to do right now for saying that Shocked , sorry..

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Post  PoseWanKenobi on Sat Nov 21, 2009 12:26 pm

Oh yeah, I guess I forgot to add that it was Friday Sad, btw... Fridays* in the title of the topic.
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Post  olimbeau on Sat Nov 21, 2009 4:02 pm

art it is me i CAN'T help you !!
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